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2017-05-08 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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In my comparatively long experience, I believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Competitors appear in front of a man of ability, while helpers appear in front of a man of character. Looking back on my past life, I realized that I didn't have to compete with my friends and colleagues because most of them eventually ended up becoming my supporters rather than my competitors in my life later. If I had positively cooperated my friends, I would have gotten more helpers throughout my life. In the army, when we make an operation plan, we first of all fix our desired end state of this operation, and then establish the objective of this operation. What should my desired end state of life be? I would hate my life to be evaluated as "competing or winning," instead, I would love my life to be seen as "cooperating or helping." The thought that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged is very detrimental to making a better society. Ability and talent must be given, but personality can be developed. God might ask me "Did you learn how to love people?"

강사 첨삭

This is such a nice opinion on this topic, Sir!

Thank you so much~

A sense of healthy competition is good to keep us going, but too much of it is highly dangerous~

In my comparatively long experience, I believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.

>>CORRECT!
 Competitors appear in front of a man of ability, while helpers appear in front of a man of character.

>>Competitors appear in front as a man of ability, while helpers appear in front as a man of character.
 Looking back on my past life, I realized that I didn\'t have to compete with my friends and colleagues because most of them eventually ended up becoming my supporters rather than my competitors in my life later.

>>CORRECT!
 If I had positively cooperated my friends, I would have gotten more helpers throughout my life.

>> If I had positively cooperated with my friends, I would have gotten more helpers throughout my life.
 In the army, when we make an operation plan, we first of all fix our desired end state of this operation, and then establish the objective of

this operation.

>>CORRECT!
 What should my desired end state of life be?

>>CORRECT!
 I would hate my life to be evaluated as \"competing or winning,\" instead, I would love my life to be seen as \"cooperating or helping.\"

>>CORRECT!
 The thought that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged is very detrimental to making a better society.

>>CORRECT!
 Ability and talent must be given, but personality can be developed.

>>CORRECT!
 God might ask me \"Did you learn how to love people?\"

>> God might ask me, \"Did you learn how to love people?\"

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