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2017-05-11 · 첨삭 강사 Mia

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: WRITING SKILL: ESSAY: Who do you most admire in life? Please answer in complete sentences. Absolutely, It's Yuna Kim. She is a amazing figure player ever. She succeed everything without the goverment's support, and there were no korean who are interested in figure skating before her succeed. She always fight herself, and endure the burden from Korean fan. She have the amazing talent, annd did effort. And now, she is a member of the Unicef. I can't explain her life, but I'm so proud of her and I will always a fangirl of her. She is amazing.

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Hi [이름]!

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~~ Teacher Mia ~~

Absolutely, It\'s Yuna Kim. She is a amazing figure player ever. She succeed everything without the goverment\'s support, and there were no korean who are interested in figure skating before her succeed. She always fight herself, and endure the burden from Korean fan. She have the amazing talent, annd did effort. And now, she is a member of the Unicef. I can\'t explain her life, but I\'m so proud of her and I will always a fangirl of her. She is amazing.

~~ Absolutely, It\'s Yuna Kim. She is the most amazing figure skating player ever. She succeeded in everything without the government\'s support, and there were no Korean who are interested in figure skating before she succeeded. She always fight for herself and endure the burden from Korean fans. She has an amazing talent and did a lot of effort to have it. And now, she is a member of the UNICEF. I can\'t explain her life but I\'m so proud of her and I will always be a girl fan of her. She is amazing.

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