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2017-05-18 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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By and large, I don't agree that increasing communication usage of computers and mobile phones by young people has had a negative effect on their reading and writing skills. Especially, writing by using mobile phones tend to be needed quick response with simple sentences. It's because writing by using mobile phones is not a real writing, but a kind of talking. Conversations have to be speedy, otherwise they would easily be boring friends. Having said that, I think young people's writing ability will be improved through speedy texting. Writing using pens for the old generation is more comfortable rather than computers or mobile phones. However, when young people want to write a letter or an essay using computers or mobile phones, there seems to be no difference compared to using pens. On the contrary, using computers or mobile phones is more convenient and useful because we can easily correct, save, and edit anything. What's more, today's report is not two-dimensional, but three dimensional, colorful, movable and audible. What to use in writing or reading is not important, but how to create beneficial and valuable idea and thought.

강사 첨삭

I am sure that the older generation survived without using a mobile phone.

However, I cannot imagine living without it!

The convenience it gives is truly undeniable^^

Thank you for doing your homework, Sir!

Have a great day~

By and large, I don\'t agree that increasing communication usage of computers and mobile phones by young people has had a negative effect on their reading and writing skills.

>>CORRECT!
 Especially, writing by using mobile phones tend to be needed quick response with simple sentences.

>> Especially, writing by using mobile phones needs quick response with simple sentences.
 It\'s because writing by using mobile phones is not a real writing, but a kind of talking.

>>CORRECT!
 Conversations have to be speedy, otherwise they would easily be boring friends.

>>CORRECT!
 Having said that, I think young people\'s writing ability will be improved through speedy texting.

>>CORRECT!
 Writing using pens for the old generation is more comfortable rather than computers or mobile phones. 

>>CORRECT!
 However, when young people want to write a letter or an essay using computers or mobile phones, there seems to be no difference compared to using pens.

>>CORRECT!
 On the contrary, using computers or mobile phones is more convenient and useful because we can easily correct, save, and edit anything.

>>CORRECT!
 What\'s more, today\'s report is not two-dimensional, but three dimensional, colorful, movable and audible.

>>CORRECT!
 What to use in writing or reading is not important, but how to create beneficial and valuable idea and thought.

>>CORRECT!

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