Homework

2017-05-26 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Hello, Marie It is Thursday. Homework. Write about one thing that you could do better if you work hard really and exert more effort. I have never thought about it. But if i work hard, I will be able to do an executive in my company. But it is very difficult and hard. But i can make it. Because i used to play Taekwondo. So i am good healthy and i am about the catches on fast and work well. So i think i can be a board member. I want to make more alot of money. Thank you. [이름]

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Jack!

Thanks for doing your homework.

Please review my corrections below.

Take note of the proper use of punctuations too.

Take care!

Talk to you later~

Ciao!

~Teacher Marie~ ^^ 

Hello, Marie.

>> CORRECT!
 It is Thursday.
>> CORRECT! 
I have never thought about it.

>> CORRECT! 
 But if i work hard, I will be able to do an executive in my company.

>> But if I work hard, I will be able to become an executive in my company.
 But it is very difficult and hard.

>> But it is very difficult.

OR:
>> But it is very hard.

 But i can make it.

>> However, I know I can do it.
 Because i used to play Taekwondo.

>> I used to play taekwondo.
 So i am good healthy and i am about the catches on fast and work well.

>> So I am physically fit and I can catch up on any kind of work well.
 So i think i can be a board member.

>> I think I can be a board member.
 I want to make more alot of money.
>> I want to make a lot of money.

OR:
>> I want to make more money.

 Thank you.

>> CORRECT! 
 Have a good day, Marie.

>> CORRECT!

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