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2017-06-01 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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title Could subjects soon be a thing of the past in Finland? Finland's children received more interestional higher score than other contries while they get a lot of break during the term and don't take tests. All contries have evnied the educatinal system of Finland. They use various materials in class like 3D printer, laptop, digital things and so on. Their teaching amiem is to set up children to adapt their future like with PBL project. Q1 Finland is devolped country. So, they spend a lot of time and efforts growing their children. Q2 My country tries to change the skills in education field but many people have still thought the more harder one studies, the more one success.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Ms. [이름]!

Thanks for your composition today! You must have some free time for you to write this. I\'m glad you do. Have a good day!
T. JanE ^^

Could subjects soon be a thing of the past in Finland?

>> Correct

Finland\'s children received more interestional higher score than other contries while they get a lot of break during the term and don\'t take tests.

>> Children in Finland received a higher school than students from other countries although they get a lot of break during the term and they don\'t take any test.

All contries have evnied the educatinal system of Finland.

>> All countries have envied the educational system of Finland. 

They use various materials in class like 3D printer, laptop, digital things and so on.

>> Correct

Their teaching amiem is to set up children to adapt their future like with PBL project.
>> Their teaching aim is to set up children to adapt to the future with PBL project. 
Q1
Finland is devolped country. So, they spend a lot of time and efforts growing their children.
>> Finland is a developed country, so they spend a lot of time and effort in raising their children. 
Q2
My country tries to change the skills in education field but many people have still thought the more harder one studies, the more one success.

>> Our country tries to change the education system, but many people still believe that the harder one studies, the more successful s/he becomes. 

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