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The Stolen Childhoods of Kashmir in Pencil and Crayon.
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India is in the middle of a civil war for many months.

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People in india can see the violence, killing, shooting the weapons everywhere.

>> People in India can see violence, killing, and shooting of weapons everywhere. 

My children are suffering from the hurts of revolt.

>> My children are suffering from the pain caused by the revolution. 

They have had a hard time with mental and body.

>> They have had a hard time mentally and physically. 

They think of safe place like meadows, streams, orchards and mountains.

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When strating to open again, the children express their feeling through drawing pictures.
>> When they start to open up again, children expressed their feelings by drawing pictures. 
My opinion:

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It is very sad story.

>> It is a very sad story. 

I think they receive many kinds of psychological thretment.

>> I think they need to get psychological treatment.