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2017-06-09 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Essay: What was the most enjoyable thing that you did during your holiday? In April, I went to Jeju with my family on weekend. My favorite place in Jeju is Seongsan Ilchulbong Tuff Cone. I learn from it to made by volcano eruption in the water. And I rode the boat and see behind of it. It was lots of leave a trace by volcano eruption. I want to go there again.

강사 첨삭

Good morning [이름]!

Thank you for yoru homework.

I enjoyed reading your essay because I also want to visit Jeju Island someday. Anyway, please my corrections.

~t. Kelly^^

Essay: What was the most enjoyable thing that you did during your holiday?
In April, I went to Jeju with my family on weekend.
>>
In April, I went to Jeju Island with my family one weekend.
My favorite place in Jeju is Seongsan Ilchulbong Tuff Cone.

>> Correct.

>> or: My favorite place in Jeju  Island is Seongsan Ilchulbong Tuff Cone.

I learn from it to made by volcano eruption in the water.
>> I have learned that there was a volcanic eruption under the water.
And I rode the boat and see behind of it.
>> And I rode a boat and saw the back of the volcano.
It was lots of leave a trace by volcano eruption.
>> There were lots of traces of the volcanic eruption.
I want to go there again.

>> Correct.

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