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2017-06-15 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I found out that not a few my friends had gotten their jobs unrelated to their majors in college. In fact, young children take too many classes and study a lot of subjects. However, who knows if one of the subjects gives him or her a great opportunity to succeed in life in the future? Studying some subjects means not only acquiring knowledge but also developing intellectual capacity. Each subject contains its unique field of intellectual capacity. Recently, the importance of human science has been put emphasis on engineering and manufacturing. That's because some inspirations and ideas could be popped up from studying human science. Some children tend to show their talents and aptitudes very early from the elementary school. Meanwhile, some people are far behind others when they are children, but after entering college, they begin to be enlightened and they are developed very quickly. As mentioned above, we need to keep an eye on all children and have to encourage them to study properly. We must not judge them to retarded children too early. Historically, not a few geniuses revealed their capability very late.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Sir [이름]^^

I believe that all people have a chance to grow, so we must nurture their abilities at any age.

Furthermore, I strongly claim that all of us are talented, only in different ways :)

Have a great and I am very excited to discuss our class with you!

I found out that not a few my friends had gotten their jobs unrelated to their majors in college.

>>I found out that not a few of my friends had gotten their jobs unrelated to their majors in college.
 In fact, young children take too many classes and study a lot of subjects.

>>CORRECT!
 However, who knows if one of the subjects gives him or her a great opportunity to succeed in life in the future?

>>CORRECT!
 Studying some subjects means not only acquiring knowledge but also developing intellectual capacity.

>>CORRECT!
 Each subject contains its unique field of intellectual capacity.

>>CORRECT!
 Recently, the importance of human science has been put emphasis on engineering and manufacturing.

>>Recently, the importance of human science has been emphasized on engineering and manufacturing.
 That\'s because some inspirations and ideas could be popped up from studying human science.

>> That\'s because some inspirations and ideas could be pop up by studying human science.
 Some children tend to show their talents and aptitudes very early from the elementary school.

>>CORRECT!
 Meanwhile, some people are far behind others when they are children, but after entering college, they begin to be enlightened and they are developed very quickly.

>>CORRECT!
 As mentioned above, we need to keep an eye on all children and have to encourage them to study properly. 

>>CORRECT!
 We must not judge them to retarded children too early.

>> We must not judge them as retarded children too early.
 Historically, not a few geniuses revealed their capability very late.

>>CORRECT!

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