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2017-06-16 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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What traditional values are not important or not necessary now? It is changing but some are keeping this culture like women's work and men's work. Be a girl, Act like a girl. Don't cry because you are a boy.. Like those lines makes us not to be ourselves. Women can carry heavy things and men dont need to help women carrying heavy things...Of course if I compare men to women, most men are strong than women but I guess not all. We shouldnt educate people like this and I think this thing is not neccessary to keep as our culture.

강사 첨삭

I can feel you Miss [이름]!
This is a very interesting topic. I hope we could talk about this in class.
~Teacher Shanee^^,

What traditional values are not important or not necessary now?

It is changing but some are keeping this culture like women\'s work and
men\'s work. 
>>> Correct!
Be a girl, Act like a girl. 
>>> If you are a girl, then act like a girl.
Don\'t cry because you are a boy..
>>> Correct!
Like those lines makes us not to be ourselves.
>>> Those lines make us pretentious.
>>> OR: Because of those lines, we cannot be ourselves. 
Women can carry heavy things and men dont need to help women carrying heavy things...
>>> Women can carry heavy things and men don\'t need to help them. 
Of course if I compare men to women, most men are strong than women but I guess not all.
>>> Of course, if I compare men to women, most men are stronger than women.
We shouldnt educate people like this and I think this thing is not neccessary to keep as our culture.
>>> We shouldn\'t educate people like this and I this thing is not necessary to keep as our culture.

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