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Many people believe that television violence has a negative effect on society because it promotes violence. Do you agree or disagree?Use specific reasons and examples to support your response.
I agree with that television violence has negative effect on society.
After watching violence movie at first, it was shocking for me but watching them over and over then I don't feel anything with it. And also I believe that nothing is wrong with it. For teenagers, they more put their feelings there and follow. Also many people try to copy what they have seen.
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You are right there Miss [이름]!
Violence on TV has a lot of negative effects on society.
That\'s why people have to choose what they watch.
~Teacher Shanee^^,
I agree with that television violence has negative effect on society.
>>> I agree that television violence has negative effect on society.
After watching violence movie at first, it was shocking for me but watching them over and over then I don\'t feel anything with it.
After watching violence movie at first, it was shocking for me but watching them over and over then I don\'t feel anything with it.
>>> When I watched a violent movie for the first time, I was shocked. But watching violent movies over and over again made me feel nothing.
And also I believe that nothing is wrong with it.
>>> Correct!
For teenagers, they more put their feelings there and follow.
>>> For teenagers, they get easily carried away and tend to follow what they watch.
Also many people try to copy what they have seen.
>>> Correct!
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