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2017-06-16 · 첨삭 강사 Travis

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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the parts. To what extent do you agree? My opinion is Yes, I agree but not totally. Of course, technology development makes human can easily communicate well each other. But there are still Organizations that like office, church and various of society. They communicate face to face. Additionally, for internet, many societies are appeared and that people get together face to face.

강사 첨삭

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I\'m happy that you making your homework, there are just some things that I want you to focus on :).

Teacher Travis.

My opinion is Yes, I agree but not totally.

>>Correct.

>>OR: I not totally agreed with the statement.
Of course, technology development makes human can easily communicate well each other.

>>With developing technology, human can easily communicate well with each other.

But there are still Organizations that like office, church and various of society. They communicate face to face.

>>But there are still organization such as office, church and various society that need to communicate personally.
Additionally, for internet, many societies are appeared and that people get together face to face.

>>In addition for internet, societies appeared and people get together personally.

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