HOMEWORK

2017-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY South Korea's drinking culture reveals much about its social structure, lifestyle, and traditions. However, it has now more alcoholics than any other country and it seems unlikely to quit the drink any time soon. It has been labeled as the country with the world's worst drinking problem. How do you feel about this? Hello Marie. How was your today?. I was having a hard time because of full the class today. any way. I just think our korean people drinking culture are very serious because of work. For the first reason, Many worker suffer from stress from company. They don't know relieving stress. so They drink much alcohol after work. For the second reasen, This is my case, I was drinking a can of beer after work three time a week. Like this, Many people doesn't think deep about drinking much alcohol, but I am not a drinker. I am on the wagone because My girlfriend is hate about drinking alcolhol. Many people need hobbies instead of drinking. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Jack!

Thanks for doing your homework.

I know that you cannot handle your liquor well.

You told me about that before.

I also don\'t enjoy drinking. I only do it occasionally and just with my friends.

Check my corrections below.

Ciao!

~Teacher Marie~ ^^

Hello Marie.

>> CORRECT!
 How was your today?.

>> How was your day?
 I was having a hard time because of full the class today. any way.
>> I was having a hard time because of my full schedule today.
I just think our korean people drinking culture are very serious because of work.

>> I think the drinking culture in Korea is very serious because of the work and the companies.
 For the first reason, Many worker suffer from stress from company.

>> First, many workers suffer from stress in their company.
 They don\'t know relieving stress. so They drink much alcohol after work.

>> They don\'t know a way to relieve stress so they drink too much alcohol after work.
 For the second reasen, This is my case, I was drinking a can of beer after work three time a week.

>> Second, and this is true in my case, they usually drink a can of beer after work. I drank a can of beer three times a week after work.

Like this, Many people doesn\'t think deep about drinking much alcohol, but I am not a drinker.

>> Just like this, many people don\'t think hard about how much alcohol they are drinking. I can say that I am not a good drinker.
 I am on the wagone because My girlfriend is hate about drinking alcolhol.

>> I am on the wagon because my girlfriend hates me drinking alcohol.

Many people need hobbies instead of drinking.

>> Most people need to have hobbies instead of drinking.

Thank you.

>> CORRECT!

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