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2017-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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South Korea's drinking culture reveals much about its social structure, lifestyle, and traditions. However, it has now more alcoholics than any other country and it seems unlikely to quit the drink any time soon. It has been labeled as the country with the world's worst drinking problem. How do you feel about this? I think bad drinking cultures should be improved. For example, older people tend to push younger people to drink a lot considering it is a good manner. Also some people push around people to drink and blame if they do not drink. Because they think people who do not drink ruins the pleasant atmosphere. Most of all I hope there are many things for people to enjoy the meeting without drinking.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Grace!

Good job in this homework!

I like the way you think.

I know that it is a serious problem in your country.

I\'m lucky that we don\'t have the same culture here.

Check my corrections below.

Ciao!

~Teacher Marie~ ^^

I think bad drinking cultures should be improved.

>> CORRECT!
 For example, older people tend to push younger people to drink a lot considering it is a good manner.

>> For example, older people tend to push younger people to drink a lot because it is supposed to be good manners.
 Also some people push around people to drink and blame if they do not drink.

>> Also, some people push others to drink and then reproach them if they don\'t.

Because they think people who do not drink ruins the pleasant atmosphere.

>> Because they think people who do not drink ruin the pleasant atmosphere.
 Most of all I hope there are many things for people to enjoy the meeting without drinking.

>> Most important of all, I hope that there are other things for people to enjoy when they get together, aside from drinking.


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