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2017-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Rain

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The bravest moment of your life. In fact, I’m not brave person. So it took quite time to think about the topic. For sure, I know i have the brave moment of my life that I don’t realize. But the bravest moment i remembered is when I had a job interview. It was my first interview to get a job and I was really nervous at that time. And I didn’t have time to prepare a job interview because when i submitted my resume, the company called me next day, they told me to come tomorrow. I was glad but really scared. So my sister helped me and i practiced responding some of questions in front of interviewee. The next day, i had a job interview and the interview progressed for an hour. They asked a lot of questions and i responded with a nervous feeling. After finishing, i couldn’t remember what they asked me about. And finally i made it. It was my bravest moment and i can’t forget the moment, the feeling at that time. But the one thing is that some ansewrs of question were not true.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

It\'s nice to know that this is the bravest moment of your life.

It\'s as if your telling this story to me over the phone. ^.^

I really enjoyed reading it!

Anyway, have a great day ahead and talk to you on Friday!

In fact, I’m not brave person.

>>In fact, I\'m not a brave person

So it took quite time to think about the topic.

>>So it took me quite some time to think about the topic.

For sure, I know i have the brave moment of my life that I don’t realize.

>>For sure, I know that I had my bravest moment of my life and I just don\'t realize it.

But the bravest moment i remembered is when I had a job interview.

>>But the bravest moment that I can remember was when I had a job interview.

It was my first interview to get a job and I was really nervous at that time.

>>CORRECT

And I didn’t have time to prepare a job interview because when i submitted my resume, the company called me next day, they told me to come tomorrow.

>>And I didn\'t have time to prepare for the interview, because when I submitted my resume, the company called me the next day and told me to come for tomorrow.

I was glad but really scared.

>>CORRECT

So my sister helped me and i practiced responding some of questions in front of interviewee.

>>So my sister helped me. I practiced responding some questions in front of my sister as the interviewer.

The next day, i had a job interview and the interview progressed for an hour.

>>The next day, I had the interview and it lasted for an hour.

They asked a lot of questions and i responded with a nervous feeling.

>>CORRECT

After finishing, i couldn’t remember what they asked me about.

>>After the interview, I couldn\'t remember the questions they asked about me.

And finally i made it.

>>CORRECT

It was my bravest moment and i can’t forget the moment, the feeling at that time.

>>It was my bravest moment and I can\'t forget that moment and the feeling I felt at that time.

But the one thing is that some ansewrs of question were not true.
>>But the thing is, some of my answers were not true.

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