Homework

Hi, [이름]! ^^

It\'s a hot but nonetheless great afternoon to us.

Thank you for always finding the time to do your homework.

Your sentences are not only great but the content of your essay is also well-thought of.

I\'m so happy today.

Thanks for making my day.

Your examples clearly depicts the kind of society we have.

I guess societies have different expectations when it comes to women.

The example about the actress being criticized for getting a divorce is infuriating.

She won\'t be getting a divorce if there was no grounds for it.

The example about the rapper is equally infuriating.

To some, it\'s okay for him to commit DUI because he\'s famous.

Where is the justice in that? It\'s just like saying that it\'s okay for other people to die if the death is caused by a famous person.

How pathetic.

Anyway, you did an awesome job.

I hope you\'re doing great.

See you again tomorrow. ^^

~Teacher Charry

I often think people expect from our public figures in wrong way.

>> I often think people\'s expectations of our public figures are wrong.

For example, an actress was criticized a lot after she divorced.

>> For example, an actress was criticized a lot after she got/was divorced.

Divorce is an individual\'s choice and the fact that she\'s divorced doesn\'t make her a bad actress.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Getting a divorce is a fundamental right in my country and the fact that she\'s divorced doesn\'t make her a bad actress.

However people expected her to be perfect and thought getting divorce would be a problem for her to be an actress.

>> However, people expected her to be perfect and thought getting a divorce would be a problem for her to as an actress.

On the other hand, a rapper was caught in drunk driving by police.

>> On the other hand, a rapper was caught drunk driving by the police.

OR >> On the other hand, a rapper was caught driving under the influence of alcohol by the police.

Drunk driving is a serious crime because it could harm not only the driver but also other innocent people.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Drunk driving is a serious crime because it could harm not only the driver but also other innocent bystanders.

However the rapper\'s fan argued it wasn\'t a big deal.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Strangely, the rapper\'s fan argued that it wasn\'t a serious offense.

After few months, the rapper came back to on TV and said he would pay his debt by his good performance.

>> After a few months, the rapper came back on TV and said he would pay his debt through his good performance.

Like those examples, I think people sometimes expect too much or too less on public figures.

>> Like those examples, I think people sometimes expect too much or too less from public figures.

The main problem is not a quantity of the expectation but using wrong criteria on public figures.

>> The main problem is not the quantity of the expectation but the use of the wrong criteria on public figures.