Homework

Hello, [이름]! ^^

How are you doing so far?

I hope you\'d feel exceptionally good as the day progresses.

Thank you for doing such a great job in answering our essay question.

Your opinions as well as your sentences were awesome.

It is true that productivity is a product of demanding systems.

These systems are sometimes sugar coated with rewards but it still one and the same.

I agree that most employers do this and most employees give in.

It\'s like throwing a piece of meat to a pack of sharks in the ocean.

They all must fight for the piece of meat because it\'s food.

Anyway, thanks for doing a great essay.

I enjoyed reading it.

I\'ll see you again tomorrow.

Take care always.

~Teacher Charry :)

I want to define the concept of productivity before I write how I think about this question.

>> I want to define the concept of productivity before I write what I think about this question.

Therefore, in this writing, I would like to say that productivity is the efficiency calculated with output per input time.

>> Therefore, in this writing, I would like to say that productivity is the efficiency calculated with output per input of time.

I think in many modern society, productivity is the result of the demands.

>> I think in many modern societies, productivity is the result of the demands.

Many work places measure employees\' so called productivity with time and outcome.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Many work places measure their employees\' so called productivity through time and outcome.

They also set goals and demand their employees to achieve them.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> They also set goals and demand that their employees should achieve them.

They don\'t simply ask to meet the goal verbally but use money or other practical rewards.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> They don\'t merely use encouragement but instead use money or other practical rewards.

Under these kind of systems, people are forced to be productive.

>> Under these kinds of systems, people are forced to be productive.

Of curse, some employees can be self motivated and they would work more efficiently than employees who are forced to be productive.

>> Of course, some employees can be self-motivated and they would work more efficiently than employees who are forced to be productive.

I know that is the best situation for both employers and employees but in most cases productivity is the result of demanding systems.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I know that, it is the best situation for both employers and employees but in most cases productivity is still the result of demanding systems.