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A scorching Thursday to us [이름]!

Thanks a lot for writing an awesome essay for today.

I truly believe that to accomplish something, you sometimes need to sacrifice a few things and that includes time and the freedom to do things your own way.

While it is true that it feels great to be able to do things according to how you want it, there are also some rules or steps that you need to follow to succeed because they\'re tried and tested.

Following your heart\'s desires is good but it has its limitations.

I agree when you said that success is a combination of an excellent plan, hard work and luck ^^

I hope you\'re doing great.

I\'ll see you again tomorrow.

Stay happy and healthy.

~Teacher Charry :)

Accomplishment is meeting a goal or achieving something good.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Accomplishment means meeting a goal or achieving something good.

Doing something own my way feels comfortable but it doesn\'t always guarantee accomplishments.

>> Doing something my own way feels comfortable but it doesn\'t always guarantee accomplishments.

For example, I studied for Korean SAT following my way when I was a high school student.

>> For example, I studied for the Korean SAT, following my way, when I was a high school student.

However the result wasn\'t good enough for me to enter the University I wanted to go.

>> However, the result wasn\'t good enough for me to enter the university that I wanted to go to.

I studied one more year and I accepted other people\'s advice.

>> I studied for one more year and I accepted other people\'s advice.

Fortunately, my second attempt was successful.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Fortunately, I succeeded on my second try.

I also got some good results when I accepted advice or followed previous model cases even when those were not same with my original plans.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I also received good results when I accepted advice from others or followed previous model cases even when those were not the same with my original plans.

In conclusion, I think accomplishment is the result of combination with well planned schedule, constant efforts and luck.

>> In conclusion, I think an accomplishment results from a combination of well planned schedule, constant efforts and luck.

Freedom to do things one\'s own way does not always make accomplishments.

>> The freedom to do things according to one\'s own way does not always guarantee accomplishments.