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2017-07-18 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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What does excessive use of smartphones imply? If people use their smartphones excessively, they are addicted to the smartphone. Noways people can not spend time doing noting. They always need something exciting and funny. I can see many people looking down to use the phones in the subway and on the street.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Grace!

Thanks for doing your homework.

You are totally right.

We are losing personal connections and meaningful interactions because of smartphones.

Check my corrections here.

Ciao!

~Teacher Marie~ ^^

If people use their smartphones excessively, they are addicted to the smartphone.

>> CORRECT!

OR:
>> If people use their smartphones excessively, they are addicted to it.
Noways people can not spend time doing noting.

>> Nowadays, people cannot spend time doing nothing.
They always need something exciting and funny.

>> CORRECT!
I can see many people looking down to use the phones in the subway and on the street.

>> CORRECT!

>> their

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