Homework

Hi, [이름]!

How\'s your day going so far? ^^

Thank you very much for writing this beautiful essay and sharing your thoughts.

I think most people are afraid of taking risks.

The idea of losing scare people very much but what they don\'t know is that, when you allow yourself to lose and make mistakes, you become better at life.

When we take risks, we usually discover something better and bigger.

Anyhow, this is my perspective in this matter.

I hope you\'re doing great.

See you again tomorrow.

~Teacher Charry :)

Taking risks is better than just following more reasonable courses sometimes.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Taking risks is sometimes better than just following more reasonable courses.

The history of how paradigms have changed shows that previous reasonable ways became unreasonable as time goes by.

>> The history of how paradigms have changed shows that previous reasonable ways became unreasonable as time went by.

For example, in early 20th century in western world, factories adopting Ford style were considered as the most efficient way to create profits.

>> For example, in the early 20th century in the western world, factories considered adopting Ford\'s style as the most efficient way to create profits.

According to Ford style\'s view, letting employees decide when and where to work is a quite risky way.

>> According to Ford\'s view, letting employees decide when and where to work is quite a risky way.

Employees who doesn\'t show up at fixed working places seem unreasonable idea to traditional employers.

>> The idea of employees not showing up at fixed working places seemed to be an unreasonable idea to traditional employers.

However, some employers in 21st century decided to adopt working at home style and implemented the new system.

>> However, some employers in the 21st century decided to adopt the style of working at home and implemented the new system.

Not all of those companies succeeded but some of them made higher profits than before.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Not all companies succeeded but some of them made higher profits than before.

This is a kind of paradigm change at workplace based on different industrial structures.

>> This is a kind of paradigm change at the workplace based on the different industrial structures.

Like an example above, changing environments often betray previously well known reasonable courses and give better results who takes risk.

>> Like the example above, changing environments often betray previously well known reasonable courses and give better results to those who take risk.