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2017-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I am also a citizen of the network generation. I memo some ideas on my smartphone, I pay bills with it, check e-mails, turn the alarm on and listen to musics while I am working on. Computer is also very important because it's a tool to handle my work. But if you want me to pick one that I miss most, then I would choose the smartphone.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!
It\'s a pleasant surprise to see your name for the first time on the composition board. I think people couldn\'t function without  the use of computers and smartphones in our world now. I couldn\'t imagine a world without them in the future.
See you on Tuesday!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I am also a citizen of the network generation.
>> correct!
I memo some ideas on my smartphone, I pay bills with it, check e-mails, turn the alarm on and listen to musics while I am working on.
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I put some of my ideas on a memo on my smartphone, I pay bills with it, check e-mails, turn the alarm on and listen to music/songs while I am working on something.
Computer is also very important because it\'s a tool to handle my work.
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Computers are also very important because it\'s a tool I use to handle/do my work.
But if you want me to pick one that I miss most, then I would choose the smartphone.
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But if you want me to pick one that I\'ll miss the most, then I would choose the smartphone.

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