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2017-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Do you think it's possible to have a happy family and a successful career at the same time? Answer in five (5) sentences. It can successful at the same time. There is a social commitment such as short working time,it is possible It need time to play,time to listen to the children at home, at company time to work it need someone's sacrifice and time margin. The succee requires the family and society of conversation.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ma\'am Sylvia!

Thank you for sharing your opinion. Please review my corrections.

See you in class!

~Kelly^^

Do you think it\'s possible to have a happy family and a successful career at the same time? Answer in five (5) sentences.
It can successful at the same time.

>> You can be successful in both areas.
There is a social commitment such as short working time,it is possible

>> I think, it is possible as long as you make a balance between work and social life.
It need time to play,time to listen to the children at home, at company time to work

>> You need time to play and listen to your children when at home and time to work.
it need someone\'s sacrifice and time margin.

>> You need t sacrifice your time.
The succee requires the family and society of conversation.

>> Success requires equal time for the family and the society.

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