Homework

Hi, [이름]! ^_^

It\'s Friday already. Hurray! kkk.

Thank you very much for taking the time to write on our composition board.

I am truly happy with your dedication to improve your writing skills.

Money is not the most important thing in this world but it\'s bearing on our daily life is so substantial that I could say that money is an essential part of our day to day existence.

Money can provide us food, clothing and shelter.

I also believe that money is not solely evil.

I think it\'s man\'s greed and selfishness that make money look evil.

Anyhow, this is just my point-of-view.

I hope you\'re doing great.

See you on Monday in class.

~Teacher Charry ^^   

I want to define the meaning of true success as a flow of internal satisfaction.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I would define true success as a flow of internal satisfaction.

I don\'t think success can be a single fixed stage.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I don\'t think success can all happen at once.

Even internal feelings are faded and disappear at last.

>> Even internal feelings fade and disappear as time goes by.

Monetary gain is a typical example of a fixed status type of success.

>> Monetary gain is a typical example of a fixed status of success.

OR >> Monetary gain is a typical example of a fixed type of success.

People will easily want more money and never feel they get true success.

>> People will easily want more money and never feel true success.

We can find stories about lottery winners having more miserable life than before they won the lottery.

>> We can find stories about lottery winners having a more miserable life than before they won the lottery.

Just being a rich itself is not enough to get internal satisfaction so the lottery winners couldn\'t enjoy the true feeling of success.

>> Just being a rich person itself is not enough to get internal satisfaction so the lottery winners couldn\'t enjoy the true feeling of success.

On the contrary, if someone tries to follow what he/she truly wants, that person might make a money while he/she tries to achieve the true goal.

>> On the contrary, if someone tries to follow what he/she truly wants, that person might make money while he/she tries to achieve the true goal.

That monetary gain doesn\'t feel hollow and help the person to have satisfaction.

>> That monetary gain doesn\'t feel hollow and helps the person to have satisfaction.

In conclusion, people can get economical success while they try to get personal fulfillment but only money itself isn\'t enough to achieve a true success.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> In conclusion, people can achieve financial success while they try to get personal fulfillment but only money itself isn\'t enough to achieve a true success.