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2017-08-08 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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If the computer had never been invented, our life would have not been convenient. we even don't realize it in common but computer is connected with our living life too much. Computer calculates every possible mathematical data in a second and finds the results. it makes our life to easy, convenient way. If i have not used google map to find out the way to the new place i've never been, i would have been in wrong place repeatly.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Ms. [Name]!

Thanks for your composition! I think we depend on computers too much. I can\'t even imagine what our life would be like without them.^^

T. JanE ^^

If the computer had never been invented, our life would have not been convenient.

>> Correct

we even don\'t realize it in common but computer is connected with our living life too much.

>> We don\'t even realize it, but computers are too much connected with our life. 

Computer calculates every possible mathematical data in a second and finds the results.

>> Correct

it makes our life to easy, convenient way.

>> It makes our lives easy and convenient. 

If i have not used google map to find out the way to the new place i\'ve never been, i would have been in wrong place repeatly.

>> If I hadn\'t used Google map to find my destination, I would\'ve been lost repeatedly. 

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