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2017-08-08 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Composition: Information concerning personal lives circulates quickly on social networks. Is this good or bad? I think about SNS. SNS is good place to record life. But, too much use is bad. It is used for crime (extrusion of personal information, kidnapping), it becomes addicted, and time of oneself disappears. Therefore, it should be used appropriately.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!
What SNS accounts do you have? Are you an active user? You are right many people are addicted to using SNS that they use most of their time on these sites instead of doing something productive. You did a good job in answering your homework. Keep it up!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I think about SNS.
>> correct!
OR>> I thought about it.
SNS is good place to record life.
>> SNS is a good place to record life.
But, too much use is bad.
>> correct!
It is used for crime (extrusion of personal information, kidnapping), it becomes addicted, and time of oneself disappears.
>> It can be used to commit crime (e.g. intrusion of personal information, kidnapping), it can become addicting, and time for oneself disappears.
Therefore, it should be used appropriately.
>> correct!

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