Homework

Hello there [이름]! ^_^

It\'s another hot and humid day, isn\'t it?

How is your day going so far?

Thank you for writing an essay and doing your best to give opinions and sentences.

I totally appreciate it. ^^

I think success and happiness depend on our own decisions.

When we let the factors beyond our control define our own success and happiness, there is a possibility that we would never become happy or successful.

The way we respond to these uncontrollable factors defines who we are and what we are capable of becoming.

Anyhow, this is just my point of view.

I hope you\'re having a productive day.

See you tomorrow. :)

~Teacher Charry

Success and happiness depend on both choices people make and factors beyond their control.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Success and happiness both depend on the choices people make and the factors that are beyond their control.

For example, if a severe natural disaster happens or a war breaks out, it\'s almost impossible to be happy or success by individuals\' own efforts.

>> For example, if a severe natural disaster happens or a war breaks out, it\'s almost impossible to be happy or succeed by an individuals\' own efforts.

However, in general, I think people\'s own decisions are important factor to success and to be happy.

>> However, in general, I think people\'s own decisions are important factors to success and to happiness.

Following is only based on my personal experience.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Being a follower can be based on my personal experience.

I can accept bad results well as long as the result was derived from my own decision.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I can accept bad results well as long as the result comes from my own decision.

On contrary, I\'m unsatisfied and complain about the bad result when I couldn\'t make my own decision.

>> On the contrary, I\'m unsatisfied and complain about the bad result when I couldn\'t make my own decision.

I think this is because I can\'t stop thinking \'what if I made other choice\' when I didn\'t get a chance to decide myself.

>> I think this is because I can\'t stop thinking about, \'what if I made other choices?\'. However, I didn\'t get a chance to decide for myself.

Accepting the result even when it\'s not good is the first step to move forward and find happiness.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Accepting the result even if it\'s not good is the first step to move forward and achieve happiness.

Therefore, success and happiness are depend on people\'s choices. 

>> Therefore, success and happiness are dependent on people\'s choices. 

Because people take responsibilities well for the results and make another step well based on their own decisions.

>> This is because people take responsibilities for the results and make another step based on their own decisions.