Homework

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Cooperation is better than competition.

Yes, competing with others is good because you get the chance to prove just what you are truly made of but cooperation will help you become a team player and a leader.

Anyhow, this is  just my point-of-view.

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~Teacher Charry

There are different types of success and sometimes cooperation is a better way to succeed, other times competition is more efficient way to succeed.

>> There are different types of success. Sometimes cooperation is a better way to succeed and other times competition is a more efficient way to succeed.

It depends on what kind of success it is.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> It depends on the kind of success a person is aiming for.

For example, if someone\'s current goal is getting a good grade in exams, competition would be more helpful than cooperation.

>> For example, if someone\'s current goal is getting a good grade in the exams, competition would be more helpful than cooperation.

On the other hand, when finding the best answer to solve a problem, cooperating together would be better than competing.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> However, when finding the best answer to solve a problem, cooperating together would be better than competing.

I usually think winning at competitions is the good one.

>> I usually think winning at competitions is a good one.

I automatically consider being good at competitions is what I should achieve.

>> I automatically thought that being good at competitions is what I should achieve.

However I know competitions not always the best way to success and also know there are other kind of success which can be made by cooperation.

>> However, I know that competitions are not always the best way to succeed and I also know that there are other kinds of success which can be made by cooperation.

I think this is the result of narrow point of view about what success is.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> In my opinion, this is the result of a narrow point of view when it comes to success.

Conclusion is that competition is not always the best way to success because there are different kind of success.

>> My conclusion is that, competition is not always the best way to succeed because there are different kinds of success.