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I don't think that face to face communication will become a thing of the past, although e-mailing or message-texting is getting more dominated.
It is because it has both pros and cons.
There are not a few merits in communicating via the Internet and text message.
To begin with, texting is a decent way to communicate between friends.
It allows people to feel comfortable because they can have much time to answer.
So it can prevent people from misunderstanding that often occurs during the face to face conversation.
What's more, we can share a great deal of information among people sending pictures, data and even videos.
What surprises us is that we can make video calls.
Meanwhile, texting or e-mailing has shortcomings that the face to face communication doesn't have.
Our eyes are windows of our mind.
Communicating without seeing his or her eyes could be a soulless talk.
That's why lovers desire to meet each other and have chances of eye contact.
The face to face communication is music while texting or e-mailing is just sound.
We need to enjoy both sound and music for our precious lives given just once.
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HELLO MR. [이름],
Thank you for doing your homework.
I think you are good in expressing yourself both in verbal and writing.
Anyway, use of the Internet and smartphones has become a global phenomenon and each of us is dependent on these technological marvels in one or the other way. While there is a notion which asserts that widespread use of the Internet, on-line communication and cellular messaging will replace the traditional form of face to face interaction, - I completely disagree with it.
To begin with, the use of the Internet and other latest communication technologies drive us to meet new people and contact the dear ones who stay far away. This can especially be true when one gets a chance to express his feelings via a text or phone call. To quote an example, Skype and Facebook have enabled people living in far flung areas to communicate effectively through video chats, thereby enabling us to contact more frequently with people we care about. This has not replaced the way we care and meet others, rather it has made it more convenient and frequent.
While the advancement of technology might scale back in personal contact to some extent for a short term, the web can, in fact, enable the present and future generations to become more polarized towards seeing siblings, parents and mates in the long run. This can be easily visualized by taking into account that if we are to sustain the net as a tool to deliver our emotions and beliefs to the world, we will need to picture proof gatherings, celebrations and events thereby obviating the need for face to face communication. Secondly, it is a well-acknowledged fact that \'the human is a social being\' and it is to the credit of this physical presence that we as a species are able to harness long-term relationships, so its value cannot be undermined for times to come. Mere endorsing words of good character by texts cannot inculcate the right kind of virtue, thereby further laying emphasis on human presence for future is required.
To conclude, by seeing both sides of the spectrum, it is clearly evident that the Internet and text messaging will not make the face to face communication a footnote of the past.
Have a nice weekend ahead!
Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
I don\'t think that face to face communication will become a thing of the past, although e-mailing or message-texting is getting more dominated.
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It is because it has both pros and cons.
It is because it has both pros and cons.
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There are not a few merits in communicating via the Internet and text message.
There are not a few merits in communicating via the Internet and text message.
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To begin with, texting is a decent way to communicate between friends.
To begin with, texting is a decent way to communicate between friends.
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It allows people to feel comfortable because they can have much time to answer.
It allows people to feel comfortable because they can have much time to answer.
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So it can prevent people from misunderstanding that often occurs during the face to face conversation.
So it can prevent people from misunderstanding that often occurs during the face to face conversation.
>> CORRECT
What\'s more, we can share a great deal of information among people sending pictures, data and even videos.
What\'s more, we can share a great deal of information among people sending pictures, data and even videos.
>> CORRECT
What surprises us is that we can make video calls.
What surprises us is that we can make video calls.
>> CORRECT
Meanwhile, texting or e-mailing has shortcomings that the face to face communication doesn\'t have.
Meanwhile, texting or e-mailing has shortcomings that the face to face communication doesn\'t have.
>> CORRECT
Our eyes are windows of our mind.
Our eyes are windows of our mind.
>> CORRECT
Communicating without seeing his or her eyes could be a soulless talk.
Communicating without seeing his or her eyes could be a soulless talk.
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That\'s why lovers desire to meet each other and have chances of eye contact.
That\'s why lovers desire to meet each other and have chances of eye contact.
>> CORRECT
The face to face communication is music while texting or e-mailing is just sound.
The face to face communication is music while texting or e-mailing is just sound.
>> CORRECT
We need to enjoy both sound and music for our precious lives given just once.
We need to enjoy both sound and music for our precious lives given just once.
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