Homework

Hi, [이름]! ^_^

Thank you for writing this beautiful essay.

I think being unique is stressful but it\'s worth it.

Everyone wants to fit in because it\'s easy.

Being unique on the other hand requires you to rise above the rest and doing that is outright uncomfortable.

It\'s not easy because it\'s not within a person\'s comfort zone but it\'s still rewarding.

Anyhow, that\'s just how I see it.

I hope you\'re having a great Friday.

See you again next week. ^_^

~Teacher Charry

In 21st century, people being themselves are valuable.

>> In the 21st century, people being themselves are valuable.

I think making people fit in is the worse but emphasizing uniqueness also can cause stress.

>> I think making people fit in is the worst but emphasizing uniqueness can also cause stress.

Korean society traditionally wanted people to fit in.

>> The Korean society traditionally wanted people to fit in.

The problem of this tendency is that everyone wants similar things so it\'s hard to find innovations in a whole society.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> The problem in this is that, everyone wants similar things so it\'s hard to find innovations in the society as a whole.

For example, top students in natural science generally becomes doctors, top liberal arts students choose to work in law field.

>> For example, top students in natural science generally become doctors while top liberal arts students choose to work in the law field.

It\'s hard to expect to find innovative and adventurous person like Steve Jobs or Mark Zuckerberg in this environment.

>> It\'s hard to expect to find an innovative and adventurous person like Steve Jobs or Mark Zuckerberg in this environment.

However not everyone can be different and unique and maybe not everyone want to be unique.

>> However, not everyone can be different and unique and maybe not everyone want to be unique.

Honestly, if someone demands me to be unique, I would get stressed.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Honestly, I would get stressed if someone demands me to be unique.

Therefore my thought is just letting people be themselves is the best.

>> Therefore, my thought is, letting people be themselves is the best.