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2017-08-18 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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What is your opinion about women in the military? In korea, there is some unique duty of man to serve in the military for 2 years. but not for women. in the view of gender equality it is very unfair so I support that women also should take the duty of military service. since the realistic conditions are not prepared, I think that we should also consider alternatives like alternative service of social welfare facilities or military tax together right now.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]gi!


Thank you for answering the composition topic.


All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==


In korea, there is some unique duty of man to serve in the military for 2 years. but not for women. in the view of gender equality it is very unfair so I support that women also should take the duty of military service. since the realistic conditions are not prepared, I think that we should also consider alternatives like alternative service of social welfare facilities or military tax together right now.


>> In Korea, men are mandated to serve the military for two years while women exempt. In light of gender equality, I support the idea that women should also have military service. Since military service for women is not a generally accepted idea yet, it would also be ideal to consider alternative public service such as social welfare or providing military tax services.  

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