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2017-08-21 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. I prefer that moving a number of times throughout my life is better than living in one place. since life is just one for everyone. I would like to spend my life more interesting. and since I believe that all people have been growing up through their experiences, It would be my great pleasure to build myself more growing than before. so I would like to move the new places that I have never been before.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]gi!

Thank you for your opinion about our composition topic.

All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==

I prefer that moving a number of times throughout my life is better than living in one place. since life is just one for everyone. I would like to spend my life more interesting. and since I believe that all people have been growing up through their experiences, It would be my great pleasure to build myself more growing than before. so I would like to move the new places that I have never been before.

>> I prefer to move a number of times throughout my life because I think it is better than living in one place. Since we only get one chance to live, I would like to spend mine in an interesting way. Additionally, I put more value in knowledge gained through experiences so encountering new experiences in new places allows me to mature as a person.

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