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2017-08-22 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion. I definitely agree that mordern mass media pay attention to personal lives of famous people very much. but it is totally because of the public who is very interested in them. if the public will pay less attention to them than now, mass media wouldn't do that. they are just making money from advertising revenue according to the ratings. nobody would like to receive attention from mass media too much, so we should try to protect them from mass media from now on in order not to receive attention very much.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]gi!


Thank you for your valued opinion.


All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==


I definitely agree that mordern mass media pay attention to personal lives of famous people very much. but it is totally because of the public who is very interested in them. if the public will pay less attention to them than now, mass media wouldn\'t do that. they are just making money from advertising revenue according to the ratings. nobody would like to receive attention from mass media too much, so we should try to protect them from mass media from now on in order not to receive attention very much.

>> I definitely agree that television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. The only reason for it is because people invest too much of their attention on them. If people would pay less attention to these celebrities then the media wouldn\'t churn out so much just to make a profit and garner high ratings. Nobody wants to have their personal lives put on display that is why celebrities should protect themselves so as not to be victimized by the media and people like us should also stop giving that much attention to them.  

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