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2017-08-22 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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In my opinion, People need to keep secrets. Of course , Meaning of secret is various but I think people have their own secrets. Also They want to keep it away from other people. Sometimes It is very harmful by themselves and sometimes It is nothing. But It depends on by themselves. Nobody can judge about it. But as a man and wife , I don't think need to keep secrets. Because of they need to share almost everything.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

It\'s a cold and rainy Tuesday in my country.

We are currently having a typhoon and it\'s scaring the hell out of me. kkk.

How\'s your day so far?

Thanks for taking the time to write on our composition board.

I think keeping secrets is okay but we need to be careful with the secrets that we have.

Sometimes, secrets are intoxicating and harmful.

We should know our limits when it comes to keeping secrets.

Anyhow, this is just my opinion.

I hope you\'re doing great.

See you again tomorrow. ^^

Take care always.

~Teacher Charry (^^,)

In my opinion, People need to keep secrets.

>> In my opinion, people need to keep secrets.
Of course , Meaning of secret is various but I think people have their own secrets.

>> [Do you mean]: Of course, the depth of a secret varies but I think people have their own secrets.

Also They want to keep it away from other people.

>> They also want to keep it away from other people.

OR >> They also try to hide it from other people.

Sometimes It is very harmful by themselves and sometimes It is nothing.

>> Sometimes, it is very harmful for them and sometimes, it means nothing.

But It depends on by themselves.

>> But it depends on them.

Nobody can judge about it. 

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Nobody can judge it. 
But as a man and wife , I don\'t think need to keep secrets.

>> But between a husband and a wife, I don\'t think there is a need to keep secrets.

Because of they need to share almost everything.

>> It\'s because they need to share almost everything to each other.

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