HOMEWORK
학생이 쓴 원문
Day by day, competition is getting much more intensified in our society.
Parents well know it from their experience in their lives.
They are not perfect and sometimes wrong even though they have pure enthusiasm.
They really want to see their children do well in life.
That is why parents nowadays put too much pressure on their kids to succeed,
In fact, there are not a few strong parenting cases that ended up imparting a great success to their kids.
Too many 'tiger moms' have been wielding their power in our community.
Meanwhile, there exist a huge number of cases of failure in parenting because of too much strong or too much weak pressure on their children.
It is natural that kids tend to be crazy about playing with friends instead of studying.
I partially agree with strong parenting, but encouragement should not cross the line into pressure.
It is easy for parents to put pressure on their kids, but it is hard to encourage them.
Studying should be started with strong self-motivation.
So encouragement focuses on strong self-motivation.
Those who taste small wins can achieve a big one.
Encouragement is to make kids feel the small wins.
강사 첨삭
HELLO MR. [이름],
I agree with you.
It\'s really easy for parents to pressure their children but they don\'t know how to encourage them.
It\'s really sad but it\'s a fact.
Anyway, thank you so much for doing your homework.
Have a nice day ahead!
Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
Day by day, competition is getting much more intensified in our society.
>> CORRECT
Parents well know it from their experience in their lives.
Parents well know it from their experience in their lives.
>> Parents know well base on their experiences in the past.
They are not perfect and sometimes wrong even though they have pure enthusiasm.
They are not perfect and sometimes wrong even though they have pure enthusiasm.
>> They are enthusiastic but sometimes imperfect.
They really want to see their children do well in life.
They really want to see their children do well in life.
>> CORRECT
That is why parents nowadays put too much pressure on their kids to succeed,
That is why parents nowadays put too much pressure on their kids to succeed,
>> CORRECT
In fact, there are not a few strong parenting cases that ended up imparting a great success to their kids.
In fact, there are not a few strong parenting cases that ended up imparting a great success to their kids.
>> CORRECT
Too many \'tiger moms\' have been wielding their power in our community.
Too many \'tiger moms\' have been wielding their power in our community.
>> CORRECT
Meanwhile, there exist a huge number of cases of failure in parenting because of too much strong or too much weak pressure on their children.
Meanwhile, there exist a huge number of cases of failure in parenting because of too much strong or too much weak pressure on their children.
>> Meanwhile, there exist a huge number of cases of failure in parenting because of too strong or too weak pressure on their children.
It is natural that kids tend to be crazy about playing with friends instead of studying.
It is natural that kids tend to be crazy about playing with friends instead of studying.
>> CORRECT
I partially agree with strong parenting, but encouragement should not cross the line into pressure.
>> I partially agree with strong parenting, but encouragement should not cross the line of pressuring them.
It is easy for parents to put pressure on their kids, but it is hard to encourage them.
It is easy for parents to put pressure on their kids, but it is hard to encourage them.
>> CORRECT
Studying should be started with strong self-motivation.
Studying should be started with strong self-motivation.
>> Studying should start with strong self-motivation.
So encouragement focuses on strong self-motivation.
So encouragement focuses on strong self-motivation.
>> CORRECT
Those who taste small wins can achieve a big one.
Those who taste small wins can achieve a big one.
>> Those who gets small achievements can get bigger ones.
Encouragement is to make kids feel the small wins.
Encouragement is to make kids feel the small wins.
>> Encouragement makes a kid feel small achievements.
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