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2017-08-24 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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You have received a gift of money. The money is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend. Which would you buy? Absolutely concert ticket I will buy~ actually I am not a big fan of Jewerly. I don't wear even a wedding ring for normal days. So I would like to buy a concert ticket I want to attend. These days a concert ticket is really expensive which costs about USD 200. With this reason I cannot go to a concert often though I like music very much. Nice music makes me happy and feel comfortable. I can refresh my boring life with good music.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^


Thank you for answering the composition topic yesterday.


All good  things,

==Teacher Charlie==



Jewerly or concert ticket?

Absolutely concert ticket I will buy~ actually I am not a big fan of Jewerly. I don\'t wear even a wedding ring for normal days. So I would like to buy a concert ticket I want to attend. These days a concert ticket is really expensive which costs about USD 200. With this reason I cannot go to a concert often though I like music very much. Nice music makes me happy and feel comfortable. I can refresh my boring life with good music.

>> If I were to choose between buying a piece of jewelry or concert tickets with the money I received, I would absolutely buy the concert tickets. I\'m not genuinely a big fan of jewelry. I don\'t even wear my wedding ring on normal days. So instead of a knickknack, I would like to purchase concert tickets to a performance I would like to see.

Besides that, even though I love music because it relaxes, lifts my mood and distracts me from my routine life, I don\'t usually go to concerts since  concert tickets nowadays are really expensive where its prices reach around $200 USD.

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