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2017-08-28 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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In which occasion would you put your foot down? ==> Sometimes I want to take a rest on weekend. At that time I go to bed and I take a nap. It is only thing that I get rid of stress. When I sleep on the bed, my wife wake me up and ask me to clean the room. It is terrible thing because I need time to break. At that time I put my foot down, and I try to keep my nap. As I am older and older, I have to take care of myself for my family. Taking nap is very helpful to me for maintaining my stamina. After I get a break or take a nap, I have to clean the room for my family's happiness. If I do not it, there will be occurred many bad things. Maybe my wife will revenge to me about my break on weekend. Anyway I am enjoying my weekend with my family very happily.

강사 첨삭

You have left me speechless again, James!

Thank you for showing how we should act to avoid conflicts. You are awesome!

This is just one of the best things I could say about you. I am so glad that I got to know you. I truly learn a lot from you every single time we talk. I hope you learn something from me, too.

And so, I have provided some ways on how you could say almost the same thing below. I hope you\'ll find them useful.

Until our next chat, James!

Regards to your family!

-Klein-

In which occasion would you put your foot down?
 ==>
 Sometimes I want to take a rest on weekend.
>>Sometimes, I want to take a rest on weekends.

At that time I go to bed and I take a nap.

>>Correct
 It is only thing that I get rid of stress.
>>It is the only thing that gets rid of my stress.
When I sleep on the bed, my wife wake me up and ask me to clean the room.
 
>>When I sleep on the bed, my wife wakes me up and asks me to clean the room.

It is terrible thing because I need time to break.
>>It is a terrible thing, because I need time for break.

At that time I put my foot down, and I try to keep my nap.
>>At that time, I put my foot down, but try to continue napping.
As I am older and older, I have to take care of myself for my family.
 
>>As I get older and older, I have to take care of myself for my family.

Taking nap is very helpful to me for maintaining my stamina.
>>Taking a nap is very helpful for me to maintain my stamina.

After I get a break or take a nap, I have to clean the room for my family\'s happiness.
 
>>After taking a break or a nap, I have to clean the room for my family\'s happiness.

If I do not it, there will be occurred many bad things.
 
>>If I do not do it, many bad things will occur.

Maybe my wife will revenge to me about my break on weekend.
>>Maybe my wife will take her revenge on me about my break on weekends.
Anyway I am enjoying my weekend with my family very happily.

>>Correct

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