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My mother once told me that if I try to hit the sun, my arrow would reach to clouds but if I aim clouds then my arrow couldn't even reach the clouds. I think she wanted to tell me I should aim to be perfect. I understand why she told me that because I know my bad habit. I'm often too generous to me and easily compromise with my laziness and simply give up the original goals. People who try to avoid hardships like me will achieve less success than people who always try to get perfect results. For example, when I prepare important exams, I try to spend less time than the real length of exams. Because practicing under difficult condition helps me to do well in real exams. I agree that aiming to be perfect will bring more success. However I still want to say that people can achieve success when they try enough. Honestly, just trying enough is much easier way to get inner peace.
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Hello there, [이름]!
Thank you very much for writing this beautiful essay.
I think there\'s nothing wrong with aiming to be perfect.
I think that\'s what separates winners from losers.
Winners are willing to make the sacrifice in order to achieve the best results.
Losers don\'t like to take on the difficult tasks because they hard to accomplish.
Continue aiming for the moon. You are very much on the right track! ^_^
See you again tomorrow.
Take care always.
~Teacher Charry :)
My mother once told me that if I try to hit the sun, my arrow would reach to clouds but if I aim clouds then my arrow couldn\'t even reach the clouds.
>> My mother once told me that if I try to hit the sun, my arrow would reach the clouds but if I aim clouds then my arrow couldn\'t even reach the clouds.
I think she wanted to tell me I should aim to be perfect.
>> I think she wanted to tell me that I should aim to be perfect.
I understand why she told me that because I know my bad habit.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I understand why she told me that since I am aware of my bad habit.
I\'m often too generous to me and easily compromise with my laziness and simply give up the original goals.
>> I\'m often to generous with myself and easily compromise with my laziness and simply give up the original goals.
People who try to avoid hardships like me will achieve less success than people who always try to get perfect results.
>> People who try to avoid hardships like me will achieve lesser success than people who always try to get perfect results.
For example, when I prepare important exams, I try to spend less time than the real length of exams.
>> For example, when I prepare for important exams, I try to spend lesser time than the real length of exams.
Because practicing under difficult condition helps me to do well in real exams.
>> Practicing under a difficult condition helps me to do well in (the) real exams.
I agree that aiming to be perfect will bring more success.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I also believe that aiming to be perfect will bring more success.
However I still want to say that people can achieve success when they try enough.
>> However, still want to say that people can achieve success when they try enough.
Honestly, just trying enough is much easier way to get inner peace.
>> Honestly, just trying enough is a much easier way to get inner peace.
Thank you very much for writing this beautiful essay.
I think there\'s nothing wrong with aiming to be perfect.
I think that\'s what separates winners from losers.
Winners are willing to make the sacrifice in order to achieve the best results.
Losers don\'t like to take on the difficult tasks because they hard to accomplish.
Continue aiming for the moon. You are very much on the right track! ^_^
See you again tomorrow.
Take care always.
~Teacher Charry :)
My mother once told me that if I try to hit the sun, my arrow would reach to clouds but if I aim clouds then my arrow couldn\'t even reach the clouds.
>> My mother once told me that if I try to hit the sun, my arrow would reach the clouds but if I aim clouds then my arrow couldn\'t even reach the clouds.
I think she wanted to tell me I should aim to be perfect.
>> I think she wanted to tell me that I should aim to be perfect.
I understand why she told me that because I know my bad habit.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I understand why she told me that since I am aware of my bad habit.
I\'m often too generous to me and easily compromise with my laziness and simply give up the original goals.
>> I\'m often to generous with myself and easily compromise with my laziness and simply give up the original goals.
People who try to avoid hardships like me will achieve less success than people who always try to get perfect results.
>> People who try to avoid hardships like me will achieve lesser success than people who always try to get perfect results.
For example, when I prepare important exams, I try to spend less time than the real length of exams.
>> For example, when I prepare for important exams, I try to spend lesser time than the real length of exams.
Because practicing under difficult condition helps me to do well in real exams.
>> Practicing under a difficult condition helps me to do well in (the) real exams.
I agree that aiming to be perfect will bring more success.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I also believe that aiming to be perfect will bring more success.
However I still want to say that people can achieve success when they try enough.
>> However, still want to say that people can achieve success when they try enough.
Honestly, just trying enough is much easier way to get inner peace.
>> Honestly, just trying enough is a much easier way to get inner peace.
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