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I think deciding own ideas of right and wrong is better than just following others' opinion. Some philosophers and critics consider the crowd is basically more stupid than individual so everyone should decide what to do individually. I understand why the critics give more credit to individuals not the crowd. However I think just saying the crowds are less clever than individuals is not enough to explain so I want to present other reason. It's true that the crowds can make bad decisions when people inside of the crowds stop thinking actively. Individuals should think about what the crowds want and are going to do. Because individuals among the crowds can make healthy criticism against the crowd and it will prevent the crowd from going to wrong direction. To do this, individuals should decide their own ideas first. After that, if the individual can agree with the crowds' opinion, he/she can follow it.
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Hello there [이름]! ^_^
Thank you for you endless effort to write nice essays.
I\'m always amazed with your opinions.
I think failure is the best stepping stone towards success.
Failures teach you how to do thing the right way.
Most of the time they\'re painful but I think people learn more when they\'re hurt.
That\'s why it is important to exercise our ability to decide for ourselves.
If we follow the crowd all the time, we will not go anywhere.
Anyway, this is just how I see it.
I hope you\'re doing great.
Keep on writing and keep on working on the use of articles. You can do it! :)
See you in class tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry I think deciding own ideas of right and wrong is better than just following others\' opinion.
>> I think deciding through one\'s own ideas of right and wrong is better than just following others\' opinion.
Some philosophers and critics consider the crowd is basically more stupid than individual so everyone should decide what to do individually.
>> Some philosophers and critics consider the crowd as basically more stupid than the individual so everyone should decide what to do individually.
I understand why the critics give more credit to individuals not the crowd.
>> I understand why the critics give more credit to the individuals not to the crowd.
However I think just saying the crowds are less clever than individuals is not enough to explain so I want to present other reason.
>> However, I think that just saying that the crowds are less clever than the individuals is not enough to explain it so I want to present other reasons.
It\'s true that the crowds can make bad decisions when people inside of the crowds stop thinking actively.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s true that the crowds can make bad decisions especially when the people inside it stop thinking actively.
Individuals should think about what the crowds want and are going to do.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Individuals should think about what the crowds want and what they are going to do.
Because individuals among the crowds can make healthy criticism against the crowd and it will prevent the crowd from going to wrong direction.
>> Because individuals among the crowds can make a healthy criticism against the crowd, it will prevent the crowd from going to a wrong direction.
To do this, individuals should decide their own ideas first.
>> To do this, individuals should decide using their own ideas first.
After that, if the individual can agree with the crowds\' opinion, he/she can follow it.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> After that, if the individual\'s opinion agrees with the crowd, he/she can follow it.
Thank you for you endless effort to write nice essays.
I\'m always amazed with your opinions.
I think failure is the best stepping stone towards success.
Failures teach you how to do thing the right way.
Most of the time they\'re painful but I think people learn more when they\'re hurt.
That\'s why it is important to exercise our ability to decide for ourselves.
If we follow the crowd all the time, we will not go anywhere.
Anyway, this is just how I see it.
I hope you\'re doing great.
Keep on writing and keep on working on the use of articles. You can do it! :)
See you in class tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry I think deciding own ideas of right and wrong is better than just following others\' opinion.
>> I think deciding through one\'s own ideas of right and wrong is better than just following others\' opinion.
Some philosophers and critics consider the crowd is basically more stupid than individual so everyone should decide what to do individually.
>> Some philosophers and critics consider the crowd as basically more stupid than the individual so everyone should decide what to do individually.
I understand why the critics give more credit to individuals not the crowd.
>> I understand why the critics give more credit to the individuals not to the crowd.
However I think just saying the crowds are less clever than individuals is not enough to explain so I want to present other reason.
>> However, I think that just saying that the crowds are less clever than the individuals is not enough to explain it so I want to present other reasons.
It\'s true that the crowds can make bad decisions when people inside of the crowds stop thinking actively.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s true that the crowds can make bad decisions especially when the people inside it stop thinking actively.
Individuals should think about what the crowds want and are going to do.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Individuals should think about what the crowds want and what they are going to do.
Because individuals among the crowds can make healthy criticism against the crowd and it will prevent the crowd from going to wrong direction.
>> Because individuals among the crowds can make a healthy criticism against the crowd, it will prevent the crowd from going to a wrong direction.
To do this, individuals should decide their own ideas first.
>> To do this, individuals should decide using their own ideas first.
After that, if the individual can agree with the crowds\' opinion, he/she can follow it.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> After that, if the individual\'s opinion agrees with the crowd, he/she can follow it.
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