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I totally agree with the statement. Actually my final goal is only doing what I want until I die. People easily say follow your dream or do what you want because it's a true success. However doing only what I want is quite hard to achieve in real life. I often think human is like animals because most of us spend time to survive and maintain lives. We don't hunt like animals do but we work to get money for daily meals. Some people often can't get up in the morning and go to bed at night due to their jobs. Doing what I want is a success but I can't spend my whole time to do only what I want. In my opinion, there are two ways to succeed. First is truly enjoy the job so working itself becomes what I want to do and second is becoming a person living on income without labor like a building owner.
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Hi there [이름]! ^_^
Happy Friday to us! :)
Thank you for giving some time in writing this essay.
I totally appreciate it.
I think when a person does a work that he does not like, it\'s called stress.
On the other hand, if he performs a work that he likes very much, it\'s called passion.
I think at some point in our lives, we need to go after our passion.
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you in class on Monday. :)
~Teacher Charry
>> CORRECT!
OR >>
Actually my final goal is only doing what I want until I die.
>> Actually, my final goal is to do what I want until I die.
People easily say follow your dream or do what you want because it\'s a true success.
>> People easily say follow your dream or do what you want because it\'s the meaning of true success.
However doing only what I want is quite hard to achieve in real life.
>> However, only doing what I want is quite hard to achieve in real life.
I often think human is like animals because most of us spend time to survive and maintain lives.
>> I often think that humans are like animals because most of us spend our time surviving and maintaining our lives.
We don\'t hunt like animals do but we work to get money for daily meals.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We don\'t hunt like animals do but we work in order to get money for our daily meals.
Some people often can\'t get up in the morning and go to bed at night due to their jobs.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There are some people who often can\'t get up in the morning and go to bed at night because of their jobs.
Doing what I want is a success but I can\'t spend my whole time to do only what I want.
>> Doing what I want is a success but I can\'t spend my whole time doing only what I want.
In my opinion, there are two ways to succeed.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In my point-of-view, there are two ways to become successful.
First is truly enjoy the job so working itself becomes what I want to do and second is becoming a person living on income without labor like a building owner.
>> First is to truly enjoy the job so working itself becomes what I want to do and second is becoming a person living on income without laboring like a building owner.
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