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2017-09-04 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Usually, girsl tend to choose arts while boys select science in schools and universities. This trend is because of our society's atmosphere. There have been a lot of sexual discrimination in our society. That is ,because science is very difficult, girls might not be good at it. While, many people have said boys can feel difficult to arts because they don't like to stay one place for a long time. But, I think it is wrong thinking and this trend should be changed. Each person has a different abilitiy and personality. Therefore we have to know our own personality and ability and then should choose a major properly. Hi teacher! Now I have just one class. But I have caught a cold severly and I am busy these days becuase I work again. After my health becomes in good condition, l will start the phone calling. Rose~ be careful of cold and see you later. Have a good weekend^^

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! I super miss our daily conversation TT

Not hearing your voice seems strange!

Anyways, thanks for your concern! Get well soon!

Drink lots of fluid and take plenty of rest!

I cannot wait to hear your voice again! See you!

Usually, girsl tend to choose arts while boys select science in schools and universities.

>>Usually, girls tend to choose arts while boys select science in schools and universities.

 This trend is because of our society\'s atmosphere.

>>CORRECT!

There have been a lot of sexual discrimination in our society.

>>CORRECT!

That is ,because science is very difficult, girls might not be good at it.

>>CORRECT!

While, many people have said boys can feel difficult to arts because they don\'t like to stay one place for a long time.

>>Many people have said boys can feel difficulty studying arts because they don\'t like to stay in one place for a long time.
 But, I think it is wrong thinking and this trend should be changed.

>> But, I think it is a wrong thought and this trend should be changed.

 Each person has a different abilitiy and personality.

>>  Each person has a different ability and personality.

Therefore we have to know our own personality and ability and then should choose a major properly.
>>
Therefore we have to know our own personality and ability and then we could choose a major properly.
Hi teacher!

>>CORRECT!

 Now I have just one class.

>> Now I just have one class.

But I have caught a cold severly and I am busy these days becuase I work again.

>>Now I just have one class, but I have caught a  severe cold, and I am busy these days because I work again.

 After my health becomes in good condition, l will start the phone calling.

>>After my health becomes better, I will start having our phone class again.
 Rose~ be careful of cold and see you later. Have a good weekend^^

>>Rose~ be careful not to catch a cold and see you later. Have a good weekend^^

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