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2017-09-04 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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Hello! i had a awesome weekend !! On saturday night , there was a farewell party for the person who last day of work. So i went to our restaurant with my girlfriend and we entered in there then my co-worker was like " Hey [이름] in the house , would like to drink a glass of beer?? and i told her to drink a beer. We got the beers and sat in chair then they started talking about their storys. I was shocked that they were speaking english so fast Literally they`re from UK,USA,Canada ..even if i didn`t understand , they asked us "do you know what does commission mean ?" and as for me who is not good english they kept talking as giving consideration to us. I felt so many things after a farewell party that i should study more and more. Why is money the most common way of judging success? Limit your answer to 4 we still live in a materialistic world .it`s inevitable. that`s why we work so hard and we try to save the money we sometimes think if i were rich ,i would buy like this..

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, [이름]!^_-

Happy Monday!

Thank you so much for dong your homework.

I have read it well.

I can actually related to that things you\'ve written.

I have made some modification for you to review.

Enjoy the rest of the day! ^^

_T. Mayleen :)

Hello! i had a awesome weekend !!

>> Hello! I had an awesome weekend!

On saturday night , there was a farewell party for the person who last day of work.

>> On Saturday night, I attended my coworker\'s farewell party.

So i went to our restaurant with my girlfriend and we entered in there then my co-worker was like \" Hey [이름] in the house , would like to drink a glass of beer?? and i told her to drink a beer.

>> My girlfriend and I entered the restaurant. My coworker asked me if I\'d like to drink a glass of beer which I didn\'t decline.

We got the beers and sat in chair then they started talking about their storys.

>> We got beers, sat on our chairs, and started talking about random stories.

I was shocked that they were speaking english so fast

>> I was shocked because they were speaking English so fast.

Literally they`re from UK,USA,Canada ..even if i didn`t understand , they asked us \"do you know what does commission mean ?\" and as for me who is not good english they kept talking as giving consideration to us.

>> They\'re from the US, UK, and Canada. Even if they know that I couldn\'t understand the, they kept talking and they even asked me if I know commission means.

I felt so many things after a farewell party that i should study more and more.

>> I realized after the farewell party that I should study more and more.

Why is money the most common way of judging success? Limit your answer to 4

we still live in a materialistic world .it`s inevitable.

>> We live in a materialistic world and it\'s normal to be judged by how much money you have.

that`s why we work so hard and we try to save the money we sometimes think if i were rich ,i would buy like this..

>> That\'s why we work hard and we try to save move so that we can buy the things that we want to.

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