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2017-09-04 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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How do you usually pitch in to make your loved ones feel better? ==> I want to maintain good relationship with my family. But I am busy in weekdays so I try to spent times with my family on weekends. Especially my daughter waits weekends because I am at home on weekends except last weekend. Last Saturday and Sunday I was at the company for a work. But except special weekends like last weekend, I can play with my daughter and my wife. We sometimes go to a screen golf place and we spend times with playing golf. If it becomes lunch time, we order some food for a lunch at there. My daughter is not good at swing golf, but she enjoys it. We don't worry about the golf score, we just enjoy our time together. I think that we do something together, it makes better connections. Also, I have to clean the room when I have times on weekends. Although I am tired but if it helps our good relationship, I will do. It is my duty as a father and a husband.

강사 첨삭

Good day! Thanks a lot for sharing this wonderful family bonding experience you usually have with your family.

It\'s always a delight listening and reading your stories.

I know that you are one great model to many fathers and husbands out there.

Let\'s keep our acts together and do what we have to.

You have inspired me once more.

Thanks a bunch!

Until our next chat!

Keep safe, James!

-Klein-

How do you usually pitch in to make your loved ones feel better?
 ==>
 I want to maintain good relationship with my family.
>>Correct 

But I am busy in weekdays so I try to spent times with my family on weekends.

>>But I am busy on weekdays, so I try to spend time with my family on weekends. 
Especially my daughter waits weekends because I am at home on weekends except last weekend.
>>Especially my daughter, she waits for the weekends, because I am usually at home on weekends (except last weekend). 

Last Saturday and Sunday I was at the company for a work.
>>Last Saturday and Sunday, I was at the company for work.

But except special weekends like last weekend, I can play with my daughter and my wife.
>>Except on special weekends, like last weekend, I can play with my daughter and my wife. 
We sometimes go to a screen golf place and we spend times with playing golf.

>>We sometimes go to a screen golf place and we spend time playing golf.
If it becomes lunch time, we order some food for a lunch at there.
>>When lunch time comes, we order some food for lunch there.

My daughter is not good at swing golf, but she enjoys it.
>>My daughter is not good at swinging golf, but she enjoys it.

We don\'t worry about the golf score, we just enjoy our time together.
>>Correct

I think that we do something together, it makes better connections.
>>I think that when we do something together, it makes our connections better.
Also, I have to clean the room when I have times on weekends.
>>Also, I have to clean the room when I have time on weekends.

Although I am tired but if it helps our good relationship, I will do.
>>Although I am tired, since it helps our good relationship, I do it.

It is my duty as a father and a husband.

>>It is my duty as a father and husband.

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