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강사 첨삭
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Do you think children nowadays eat too much fast food and don\'t play enough sports? Please explain your answer.
Yes, I think so.
>> Correct
Nowdays children eat fast foods instead proper meals. Because they don\'t have much time. So their health is weaker.
>> Nowdays, most children eat fast food instead of proper meals because they don\'t have much time. This compromises their health because their immune system becomes weaker.
Almost children in Korea go to academys after school.
>> Almost all children in Korea go to academies after school.
Many parents think that their kids get bad scores on test if they don\'t study in advance at academys. So kids just don\'t have enough time to play sports.
>> Many parents think that their kids will get low scores in their test if they don\'t study in advance at the academy. This resulted to kids not having enough time to play sports.
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