Homework

Happy Friday [이름]! ^_^
Thanks for spending some time to write an essay on our composition board.

I appreciate your effort as always.

I don\'t think our happiness should always be based on others\' benefit.

Most of the time, we should think of our individual happiness first before thinking of others\' happiness.

This is because you cannot give something you don\'t have.

Anyway, that is just how I see it.

I hope you\'re having a great day.

See you next week.

~Teacher Charry ^^

I don\'t think I should always care others\' benefit when I achieve something.

>> I don\'t think I should always care about others\' benefit when I achieve something.

Some achievements can influence other people.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Some achievements can affect other people.

For example, if I did something related with public good like a volunteer work, my achievements would not only be mine but also others\' too.

>> For example, if I did something related with the public good like a volunteer work, my achievements would not only be mine but also others\' too.

However there are other kind of achievements which are not related to other people.

>> However, there are other kinds of achievements which are not related to other people.

If I master a music instrument, play it alone and find happiness myself, it won\'t benefit others.

>> If I master a musical instrument, play it alone and find happiness from it, it won\'t benefit others.

Furthermore, some kind of achievements can\'t benefit others.

>> Furthermore, some kinds of achievements can\'t benefit others.

Most exams like SAT, my achievement will make other competitors fail especially in relative evaluations.

>> In most exams like SAT, my achievement will make other competitors fail especially in relative evaluations.

Therefore I don\'t want to actively consider how to benefit other people when I want to achieve something.

>> Therefore, I don\'t want to actively consider how to benefit other people when I want to achieve something.

Still, people can stop doing something or at least think twice if the achievement influences to other people in negative way.

>> Still, people can stop doing something or at least think twice if the achievement influences other people in a negative way.