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2017-09-08 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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What is your biggest goal in life? My biggest goal in life is to live like Jesus, I had lived with my parents for 20 years. at that time I felt gloomy. because they struggled everyday. so I talked a little and I was shy. l have changed from I met Jesus. I knew Jesus love me. and Jesus send me best parents. so I had a confidence. from that time, I have had positive character and I look at the world thankfully. I want to be like a Jesus. I hope to give love to my neighborhood.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]

Hello! How are you feeling today? Well, thank you for sending this is.

Here is a thought that you may ponder on:

\"The object of education is to prepare the young to educate themselves throughout their lives.

In our daily activities, we can learn new things.

Preparing yourself with all the challenges in life is just a trial for you to move forward.

In this way, you will find yourself, knowing that you\'ve learn a lot.\"

T. Jeny 


What is your biggest goal in life?
>>correct
My biggest goal in life is to live like Jesus,

>>correct
 I had lived with my parents for 20 years. at that time I felt gloomy.

>>correct
 because they struggled everyday. so I talked a little and I was shy.

>>because they struggle every day, so I don\'t talk too much and I was shy.
 l have changed from I met Jesus. I knew Jesus love me.

>> l have changed when I met Jesus. I know Jesus love me.
 and Jesus send me best parents. so I had a confidence.

>>Jesus sent me best parents, so I have to be confident.
 from that time, I have had positive character and I look at the world
thankfully.

>>From that time, I have had positive character and I have had looked at the world
thankfully.

 I want to be like a Jesus. I hope to give love to my neighborhood.

>>I want to be like Jesus and I hope to give love to my neighborhood.

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