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2017-09-11 · 첨삭 강사 Sophia

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Staff or employee productivity is crucial and vital in keeping companies alive and thriving. Theoretically, staff productivity can increase by emphasizing love for a company, but it is not easy for an employer to materialize how to make them love the company. The key factor in employee productivity may start with engagement, in other words, active participation. We often witness that disengaged staff members drag a company down. However, engaged employees show up more often, stay longer, and are more productive overall. How can we make them actively engaged staff? When employers micromanage, staff members become reserved like bystanders rather than participants. So the best way to encourage productivity is to encourage individuals to take ownership over how they manage their own time and resources by encouraging autonomy. Most people tend to be more strongly motivated by autonomy than financial rewards. Therefore, employers need to foster working environment and condition which emplo

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HELLO MR. [이름],
Where have you been? kkk
I hope to talk to you on Wednesday.
Enjoy the rest of the day!
Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
Staff or employee productivity is crucial and vital in keeping companies alive and thriving.
>> CORRECT 
Theoretically, staff productivity can increase by emphasizing love for a company, but it is not easy for an employer to materialize how to make them love the company.
>> CORRECT 
The key factor in employee productivity may start with engagement, in other words, active participation.
>> CORRECT 
We often witness that disengaged staff members drag a company down.
>> CORRECT 
However, engaged employees show up more often, stay longer, and are more productive overall.
>> CORRECT 
How can we make them actively engaged staff?
>> CORRECT 
When employers micromanage, staff members become reserved like bystanders rather than participants.
>> CORRECT 
So the best way to encourage productivity is to encourage individuals to take ownership over how they manage their own time and resources by encouraging autonomy.
>> CORRECT 
Most people tend to be more strongly motivated by autonomy than financial rewards.
>> CORRECT 
 

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