Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
It's always good listening other people's opinions and get a chance to improve the formal idea. However, criticism judging and finding fault itself can't be always good or constructive. Not every advice are effective and necessary. Some criticism judging or finding fault can hurt the listener's feeling and make negative influence. Furthermore, criticizing often creates conflict among people. This is why criticism-judging or finding fault with the ideas and actions is not always helpful to personal well-being and social progress. To make criticism-judging be helpful to for personal well-being and social progress, giving healthy advice when it is needed is important. In conclusion, rather than just making criticism-judging or finding fault, making those things in a right place at right on time is good for personal well-being and social progress.
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Hello there [이름]!
It\'s rainy in my city again.
It\'s rainy in my city again.
How\'s your day so far?
Thank you for writing an essay for today.
I always learn a lot from your essays.
I think criticisms don\'t work every time.
Sometimes positive reinforcement is necessary.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again tomorrow.
Take care always.
~Teacher Charry :)
It\'s always good listening other people\'s opinions and get a chance to improve the formal idea.
>> [Do you mean]: It\'s always good listening to other people\'s opinions and get a chance to improve a former idea.
However, criticism judging and finding fault itself can\'t be always good or constructive.
>> However, criticism, judging and finding fault itself can\'t be always good or constructive.
Not every advice are effective and necessary.
>> Not every advice is effective and necessary.
Some criticism judging or finding fault can hurt the listener\'s feeling and make negative influence.
>> Some criticisms, judgments or finding faults can hurt the listener\'s feelings and make a negative influence.
Furthermore, criticizing often creates conflict among people.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In addition, criticism often creates conflict among people.
This is why criticism-judging or finding fault with the ideas and actions is not always helpful to personal well-being and social progress.
>> This is why criticism, judging or finding fault in the ideas and actions of a person is not always helpful to develop a person\'s personal well-being and social progress.
To make criticism-judging be helpful to for personal well-being and social progress, giving healthy advice when it is needed is important.
>> To make a criticism or a judgment helpful for personal well-being and social progress of a person, giving a healthy advice when it is needed is important.
In conclusion, rather than just making criticism-judging or finding fault, making those things in a right place at right on time is good for personal well-being and social progress.
>> In conclusion, rather than just making criticism, judgment or finding fault,, making those things at a right place and at a right time is good for a person\'s personal well-being and social progress.
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