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I find more pleasure when I attained the result than I pursue the goal. I agree that people can find satisfaction while they are pursuing the goal. I felt those kind of feelings when I found out myself keeping the original schedule. I think people who consider the process as being more important than the result have a tendency to find more pleasure from the pursuit of their own desires. In my case, if I have to choose between good result comes after poor process and poor or common result comes after good process, I would choose the former. I know this kind of attitude could be spoiled easily and become consequentialism. Maybe following consequentialism is the reason why some people don't care about process and other people's loss while they try to make money. I still think getting a planned result is better than just having a good process because the good result is a more practical reward which I can grab in my hand.
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Hello there [이름]!
Thank you for always doing your best to make good essays.
This one is not an exception. Good job! ^_^
I think both are important in one journey through life.
Looking at the process and it\'s benefit is a very good motivation in the long run.
On the other hand, achieving your goal is a very good immediate motivation.
At least that\'s how I see it.
Anyhow, that is just my opinion.
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry :)
I find more pleasure when I attained the result than I pursue the goal.
>> I find more pleasure when I attain the result than when I pursue the goal.
I agree that people can find satisfaction while they are pursuing the goal.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s true that people can find satisfaction while they are pursuing the goal.
I felt those kind of feelings when I found out myself keeping the original schedule.
>> I felt those kinds of feelings when I found myself keeping the original schedule.
I think people who consider the process as being more important than the result have a tendency to find more pleasure from the pursuit of their own desires.
>> I think people who consider the process as more important than the result have a tendency to find more pleasure from the pursuit of their own desires.
In my case, if I have to choose between good result comes after poor process and poor or common result comes after good process, I would choose the former.
>> In my case, if I have to choose between the good result which comes after a poor process or a poor/common result which comes after a good process, I would choose the former one.
I know this kind of attitude could be spoiled easily and become consequentialism.
>> I know this kind of attitude could be spoiled easily and could result to consequentialism.
Maybe following consequentialism is the reason why some people don\'t care about process and other people\'s loss while they try to make money.
>> Maybe following consequentialism is the reason why some people don\'t care about the process and other people\'s loss while they try to make money.
I still think getting a planned result is better than just having a good process because the good result is a more practical reward which I can grab in my hand.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I still think getting a planned result is better than just having a good process because the good result is a more practical reward since it is tangible.
Thank you for always doing your best to make good essays.
This one is not an exception. Good job! ^_^
I think both are important in one journey through life.
Looking at the process and it\'s benefit is a very good motivation in the long run.
On the other hand, achieving your goal is a very good immediate motivation.
At least that\'s how I see it.
Anyhow, that is just my opinion.
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry :)
I find more pleasure when I attained the result than I pursue the goal.
>> I find more pleasure when I attain the result than when I pursue the goal.
I agree that people can find satisfaction while they are pursuing the goal.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s true that people can find satisfaction while they are pursuing the goal.
I felt those kind of feelings when I found out myself keeping the original schedule.
>> I felt those kinds of feelings when I found myself keeping the original schedule.
I think people who consider the process as being more important than the result have a tendency to find more pleasure from the pursuit of their own desires.
>> I think people who consider the process as more important than the result have a tendency to find more pleasure from the pursuit of their own desires.
In my case, if I have to choose between good result comes after poor process and poor or common result comes after good process, I would choose the former.
>> In my case, if I have to choose between the good result which comes after a poor process or a poor/common result which comes after a good process, I would choose the former one.
I know this kind of attitude could be spoiled easily and become consequentialism.
>> I know this kind of attitude could be spoiled easily and could result to consequentialism.
Maybe following consequentialism is the reason why some people don\'t care about process and other people\'s loss while they try to make money.
>> Maybe following consequentialism is the reason why some people don\'t care about the process and other people\'s loss while they try to make money.
I still think getting a planned result is better than just having a good process because the good result is a more practical reward which I can grab in my hand.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I still think getting a planned result is better than just having a good process because the good result is a more practical reward since it is tangible.
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