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Title- Tanker, dredger collide off Singapore: 2 dead, 3missing

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The oil tanker from Indonesia crashed the dredger in Singapore\'s ocean.

>> An oil tanker from Indonesia crashed into the dredger in Singapore\'s ocean. 

It caused 2 dead and 3 missing.

>> Two people died and three are missing. 

So the authorities is looking for them near the collision site, investigating the cause of the collision.
>> The authorities are looking for them near the collision site while investigating on the cause of collision. 
In my opinion.......

>> Here\'s my opinion. 

My country happened the same situation before 10 years ago.

>> The same incident happened in our country 10 years ago. 

The oil tanker collided the dredger on western sea in Tea-an.

>> An oil tanker collided with the dredger on the western sea in Tea-an. 

So, many people did volunteer work, removing the oil with the paper by their hands.

>> Many people volunteered to remove the oil with paper by their hands. 

After that, we have the beautiful sea now.

>> After that incident, our sea is beautiful now. 

Before a few days ago, I heard the news that it was 10th anniversary after the accident, Tae-an recovers much more clear than before.

>> It was the 10th anniversary of the incident a few days ago. Tea-an has completely recovered. 

So, it has held the festival and then has advertised to visit there on TV.
>> They have a festival and they advertise on TV. 
I made a mistake that I posted my words on last Thursday.

>> I made a mistake that I posted the article last Thursday. 

I am sorry for that....^^

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See you tomorrow in class....

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