Homework

Hello there [이름]!

It\'s another happy Friday for all of us.

Thanks for this wonderful essay.

Childhood obesity is becoming a very popular health problem nowadays.

You\'re right when you said parents have the biggest role in making sure that their children stay healthy and fit.

Unfortunately, some parents are too busy earning for a living and can\'t really manage to check on their kids\' diet.

This is due to the society\'s demands.

Anyhow, I\'m glad that you\'re not into junk food too.

Stay healthy and fit.

~Teacher Charry ^_^

I saw parents\' preferences for diet affects their children\'s preferences.

>> I saw that the parents\' preferences for diet affects their children\'s preferences.

My mother doesn\'t like fast foods like hamburger and fries so she didn\'t choose fast food for daily menu when I was young.

>> My mother doesn\'t like fast food like hamburger and fries so she didn\'t serve fast food for our daily menu when I was young.

As a result, I still don\'t eat fast food alone.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> As a result, I still don\'t eat fast food up to this moment when I am alone.

I only eat them when my companions want to eat it.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> The only time I eat them is when my companions want to eat them.

Not only about fast food but also about other foods, people usually keep their preferences from their childhood.

>> [Do you mean]: This issue is not only about fast food but also about other food as well. People usually keep their preferences from their childhood.

Therefore I think that how parents choose menu for daily meal strongly affect to children\'s health.

>> Therefore I think that how parents choose the menu for the daily meal strongly affects their children\'s health.

Child obesity can be prevented by their parents too.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Parents can avoid child obesity too.

However I think it\'s not fair to shift all responsibilities to parents about child obesity.

>> However, I think it\'s not fair to shift all responsibilities to parents about child obesity.

Because some parents are too busy to earn their daily bread and can\'t really care about what their children eat.

>> This is because some parents are too busy to earn their daily bread and can\'t really take care of preparing food for their children.

As long as the society takes some responsibilities about poverty, the society should also care about children\'s health too.

>> As long as the society takes some responsibilities about poverty, the society should also care about children\'s health.

OR >> Since the society takes some responsibilities about poverty, the society should also care about children\'s health.