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2017-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Are older people actually wiser? NO. I dont' think so. Older people have many experience. so we have to respect them. but some people doesn't. They have ignore young people's opinion and dont' listen to other young people. sometimes young people have a wisedom. so I think we should have a respect when we see another people regardless of age. man have to be respected each other. age is not most important thing.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] !!!

It was nice to receive your homework. I do hope that you can find time to review the corrections that I\'ve made, But I congratulate you for writing an essay. I do believe that you can further improve your writing skills. Good job and keep it up!!!!

T.Jeny


Are older people actually wiser?
>>correct
NO. I dont\' think so.

>>>>correct
 Older people have many experience. so we have to respect them.

>>Older people have many experiences so we have to respect them.
 but some people doesn\'t.

>>but some people don\'t.

They have ignore young people\'s opinion and dont\' listen to other young people.

>>They ignore young people\'s opinion and they don\'t listen to them.
sometimes young people have a wisedom.

>>Sometimes young people have  wisdom.

so I think we should have a respect when we see another people regardless of age.

>>So I think we should respect other people when we see them regardless of age.
man have to be respected each other. age is not most important thing.

>>Man should respect each other. Age is not the most important thing.


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